Hello! I have yet to play the game but it looks nice! however I've seen some typos in the main page(also some recomendations) , so I hope I don't come out as rude :p
So first I would recommend you to change things like "You are a detective who has just moved to a new town. You are involved in a serial killer case" to "You are a detective who has just moved to a new town and are involved in a serial killer case" do you get what I mean? Like don't separate every sentence and just try to stick them together
Also I've seen a small typo in th MC introduction, like "She have" instead of "She has". Besides, I would recommend changing some words since in some sentences the choose of words is a bit poor
And something that also may bugs the eye is writing on the same sentence or paragraph both "He is" and "He's", maybe stick to one because it looks a bit off
The rest seems good! The main issue would be the sentences thing but overall it looks nice, so keep going! ^^
(I wanted to write this on the discord server but the link seems to be down)
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我虽然更新了demo到3.0版本，但是并没有看到dane的1-2章，是我的问题吗？
好的，我解决这个问题了，不是在原来的版本上更新，而是卸载后重新安装。
Hello! I have yet to play the game but it looks nice! however I've seen some typos in the main page(also some recomendations) , so I hope I don't come out as rude :p
So first I would recommend you to change things like "You are a detective who has just moved to a new town. You are involved in a serial killer case" to "You are a detective who has just moved to a new town and are involved in a serial killer case" do you get what I mean? Like don't separate every sentence and just try to stick them together
Also I've seen a small typo in th MC introduction, like "She have" instead of "She has". Besides, I would recommend changing some words since in some sentences the choose of words is a bit poor
And something that also may bugs the eye is writing on the same sentence or paragraph both "He is" and "He's", maybe stick to one because it looks a bit off
The rest seems good! The main issue would be the sentences thing but overall it looks nice, so keep going! ^^
(I wanted to write this on the discord server but the link seems to be down)
Was this game updated?😱